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All Deviations
All Deviations




I check my watch, it's eight o'clock
And you are nowhere to be found
I tap my feet, a steady beat
And as I start to look around
I see you're fake, and your mistake
Is that you didn't even call
I start to sigh into the night

You're like a glass full of sand in the middle of a desert
Like a stone in the middle of rocky shore
Like a tree in the middle of the forest that's the city
but you won't be the center of my life anymore

A little tone, and so my phone
Is jumping round I pick it up
And as I'm walking home you talk
About how you ran out of luck
And had no time to drop a line
And let me know that you were stuck
Hang up and fly into the night

You're like a glass full of sand in the middle of a desert
Like a stone in the middle of rocky shore
Like a tree in the middle of the forest that's the city
but you won't be the center of my life anymore

And so I'm home, I'm all alone
And I have nothing else to do
And so I drink and start to think
About the way I think of you
I write these words that go unheard
At least until they strike a chord
Look up and cry into the night

You're like a train out of gas in the middle of the station
Like a plane on the runway without a crew
Like an "X" on a map that marks the wrong location
What did I ever see in you?

You're like a glass full of sand in the middle of a desert
Like a stone in the middle of rocky shore
Like a tree in the middle of the forest that's the city
but you won't be the center of my life

You're like a glass full of sand in the middle of a desert
Like a stone in the middle of rocky shore
Like a tree in the middle of the forest that's the city
but you won't be the center of my life anymore
©2006-2008 ~gingerpeace
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It's where I got the main theme from.

I wrote this trying to combine effective writing with the good old Situation Writing that I'm fond of. I like the first verse and the chorus but I'm not that proud of the other verses, mainly because I don't think I quite got the essence of them. I wrote them a couple of days after the first verse and main chorus, But I really didn't want this one to go unfinished.
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=tiger-queen:icontiger-queen: Apr 9, 2006, 6:26:12 PM
I like this one. Your writing is getting better and better everyday and if you don't mind me saying so, I think this year espcially you've burst forward with alot of brilliant songs. I love being able to hear them played, but I want to hear this in full next time ok!
good to see it's finished, and I'm glad you finally got the line that was bugging you

I like the repition at the end of piece too, it's a strong reinforcement of the rest of the piece. :)
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=kagrmom:iconkagrmom: Apr 20, 2006, 6:24:56 AM
Yes!! I love the strong reinforcement.......and I would also like to hear this set to music....it has a musical beat of its own and it would be a very good melody!!

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~Angel-Child-Le:iconAngel-Child-Le: Apr 22, 2006, 5:23:47 PM
I really like this one.

You're like a glass full of sand in the middle of a desert
Like a stone in the middle of rocky shore
Like a tree in the middle of the forest that's the city
but you won't be the center of my life anymore

this bit in my favorite, especially the 1st line.

This song, definatley sounds familiar, the story to it that I get that is.

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~Kyhrest:iconKyhrest: May 16, 2006, 8:37:10 AM
good stuff man. dug the following aye:

You're like a train out of gas in the middle of the station
Like a plane on the runway without a crew
Like an "X" on a map that marks the wrong location
What did I ever see in you?

just on reading it again though.. what do you reckon of it as the following:

You're a train out of gas in the middle of a station
A plane on a runway without any crew
An 'X' on a map that marks no location
I wish that I knew what I once saw in you

Less "the's" and more direct as a metaphor than a simile... 'No'd keeps up the mystery of 'X' in the third line going.. though I guess 'wrong' can do the same 'pending on where ya going ; )

anyway as I said ..dig the piece on the whole. For all I know.. the way I wrote it could fuck up the phrasing completely! heh.. catch ya later man..

peace oww ; )

(drop us a line on my deviantart if ya get the chance.. I'm gonna try work it out and add something ; )
~gingerpeace:icongingerpeace: May 18, 2006, 11:09:41 PM
you're right that it's more direct as a metaphor rather than a simile - and I do like the way you wrote the third line.

The fourth line has to stay that way for the music.

Ta for the input.

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