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The Smallest Ripple by ~gingerpeace:icongingerpeace:



Nothing’s sacred, Nothing’s free
Pay the price, Ignore the fee
Close your eyes and you will see
We’re chained to fate, Mortality

Overheard, Under-seen
Blackened wasteland, no more green
Soak the soul in gasoline
Light a match and burn it clean

Black where light had never shone
Weakened life, Killed the strong
Ruined world, Glory gone
But birds still sing their sacred song

Iron man and Neon girl
Forgotten future, Wasted world
No more diamonds, no more pearls
The truth will never be unfurled

My shipmates stand upon the sand
Of a dark and unknown land
The ship is now no longer manned
As it falls by Neptune\'s hand

My heart is now cast on the floor
My brain is dead, my soul is sore
Through flesh they eat, Through bone they gnaw
This pain I’ve never felt before

Sparks of hate fuel fiery life
Till once again sinks deep my knife

My brain was smart my heart was brave
My soul is now no more a slave
The message etched upon my grave
“The smallest ripple breaks a wave”
©2003-2008 ~gingerpeace
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I wrote this in a space of 3 years. I personally think it is the best poem I have ever written, even though a ripple can't break a wave. But poets should inderstand that anyway. I also want the last verse on my otherwise unmarked gravestone when I am buried in the cemetery amidst red earth.
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`wernstrum:iconwernstrum: Jun 9, 2003, 4:08:06 AM
nice message, gr8 aliteration throughout, especially:

Sparks of hate fuel fiery life

keep up the good work.

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Waste not want not
-- The Mask
~ralasterphecy:iconralasterphecy: Jun 9, 2003, 4:11:45 AM
Outstanding! Vivid Imagery combined with some profound thoughts. Nice flow with good rhymes. Great job!

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~kylere:iconkylere: Jun 9, 2003, 6:04:04 AM
I really appreciate the fluid nature of this poem
~firm-boy:iconfirm-boy: Jun 9, 2003, 5:50:57 PM
this is great.. a long time coming but well worth it Thumbs Up

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All I know is that I don't know nothin'
~valar:iconvalar: Jun 14, 2003, 8:58:38 AM
I love the mythology and mod culture references and how they are mixed with nature to form one big message in vivid images.
The rhymes don't seem too forced and I love rhyme!

I think it's great :) (Smile)

Hope that helps.

Wise Sometimes,

Valar.

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They All Sleep. We Just Dream.
=kagrmom:iconkagrmom: Jun 14, 2003, 2:27:49 PM
Brilliant imagery!! I love the fluidity of this piece.
You are so right as we watch the earth being misused and abused. At least you are doing something about it!
Strong! message.
Also, welcome to DA. I hope you enjoy your stay. I am very fortunate to have met youw00t!
How was your day??

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mari



A man's home is his castle.....let him clean it........anon
~musicobsessed:iconmusicobsessed: Dec 1, 2003, 10:41:28 PM
Brilliant idea. the imagery speaks for itself.

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"maybe you'll be president and know right from wrong,
or in the flood you'll build an ark and sail us to the moon"
~Geoffoir:iconGeoffoir: Jan 1, 2004, 4:13:06 AM
This is really good... a bit like one of my first submitted poems, but alot better than mine